tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3026637618580113917.post410152099958140711..comments2014-05-15T23:57:29.405-04:00Comments on Running Amok, And Other Very Serious Adventures: Excerpt from The Sentinels, Work in ProgressGirl From Nowherehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13958845293470755901noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3026637618580113917.post-26515906716021779822011-12-29T20:48:15.921-05:002011-12-29T20:48:15.921-05:00Angela- thank you very much for taking the time to...Angela- thank you very much for taking the time to read and offer some suggestions- I agree with yours completely and it's so helpful to get an insider's viewpoint! Showie-It will be done by end of 2012 at latest, but I'm aiming for end of summer/beginning of fall. In the meantime, I'm trying not to drive MYSELF crazy with worries about getting published! It definitely won't be published if I don't write it first, right?!! haha My ultimate dream would be that everyone who reads it would go to work completely incapable of functioning after staying up all night to finish just one more chapter....is that cruel? ;)Girl From Nowherehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13958845293470755901noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3026637618580113917.post-59177101609973388982011-12-28T22:21:11.645-05:002011-12-28T22:21:11.645-05:00How long before the book is finished?! Talk about ...How long before the book is finished?! Talk about driving people crazy!! :) I will say that I was never much of a reader (except for the Archie comic books we all used to pass around when we were younger) but as I've gotten older I'm enjoying reading more and more and the excerpt is very well written. My cousin who is studying to be a journalist says that the best way to find out if a book is going to be good is if the first sentence causes you to ask questions. Well that entire excerpt caused me to ask questions and it's driving me crazy that I have to wait for the answers. So far it seems that it's going to be the kind of book where you lose sleep and are groggy for work in the morning because you just HAD to read the next chapter!!!!Shohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01226729925727624509noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3026637618580113917.post-62212437504561895292011-12-28T22:14:46.409-05:002011-12-28T22:14:46.409-05:00I think you did a great job. There is enough myste...I think you did a great job. There is enough mystery and intrigue here to make the reader want to know more about the situation, just like Sho said. That is a good thing. Keep going. You have set up the scene and situation quite well. <br /><br />A couple of suggestions if I may to use here or to use as you go forward: always remember your sensory details. Those are so important--all five senses. You do great here, but a tad more like smell and such would put it over the top. Also, be careful of cliches such as quick as a blink. If there is another way to describe it and get the same effect, you may want look at that (I say this as someone who loves cliches--my editor always dings me on it). <br /><br />Otherwise, you've done a great job. I'm intrigued with the world and characters you have created. Thanks for asking me to read it. I feel honored :)Angela Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12488555961691093024noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3026637618580113917.post-17289157094813743662011-12-28T16:21:45.167-05:002011-12-28T16:21:45.167-05:00Yes, Sho!! Keep wondering!!! My goal is to slowly ...Yes, Sho!! Keep wondering!!! My goal is to slowly drive people crazy with curiosity so when I finish writing the book and get published, they will HAVE to buy it to avoid going insane!! lolGirl From Nowherehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13958845293470755901noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3026637618580113917.post-23280951238433225992011-12-27T20:00:17.000-05:002011-12-27T20:00:17.000-05:00I agree with J, I'm interested to see where it...I agree with J, I'm interested to see where it goes but more so I want to know where they came from!!! What are they? Where were they? And why are they there now?!?! I don't think I like excerpts much!!!!!Shohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01226729925727624509noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3026637618580113917.post-18092944069111469332011-12-26T22:11:12.518-05:002011-12-26T22:11:12.518-05:00J- yay!! best compliment ever for a writer is to h...J- yay!! best compliment ever for a writer is to hear you want more!! :) <3Girl From Nowherehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13958845293470755901noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3026637618580113917.post-77244162235842944882011-12-26T18:25:48.118-05:002011-12-26T18:25:48.118-05:00I got a bit upset when I got to the end of the pas...I got a bit upset when I got to the end of the passage, because I wanted to know what happened next, haha! I'm already excited to see where this book goes!- J -https://www.blogger.com/profile/07571599520005678456noreply@blogger.com